In the first composition class, he extracted some good words and sentences. I asked him to say what was good about that article? Why do I get high scores? He asked me to say it because he wanted to hear it. Although I knew that he didn’t know how to say it before he let me say it first, I just smiled and then analyzed the conception, structure, theme, emotion, language and other aspects of the article. Because he listened carefully and was happy, I said by the way: we will still study composition next class, but next time we will start writing. But don’t be nervous. If you can’t write, there will be me. Let’s write together, or you can write according to your thoughts and ideas first, and then I will modify it. Let’s see how to modify it better? After the modification, you are responsible for copying it down and reading it aloud. Then we will analyze the difference between them and strive for greater progress, OK? He agreed happily. In the second composition class, we revised the composition of his exam together. I first analyzed why he only had 20 to 10 for the composition with a total score of 40? That is to point out what problems exist in his composition, and then point out the direction of modification. The title of that composition is that I am friends with basketball. He wrote that he liked playing basketball, and he had to sneak out to play basketball in class. As a result, he was caught and punished by the teacher. He also played basketball in other people’s vegetable fields several times, he was sued to his parents because he trampled someone else’s food, and finally got a severe beating. I told him that the first problem of this article was deviating from the theme. The title requires me to become friends with basketball. What do you like about basketball and what benefits does playing basketball bring to you? For example, it can make you healthy and happy, make your life full of fun, or when you are unhappy, playing basketball can make you forget all your troubles and relieve the pressure of body and mind, etc. But your writing that you like playing basketball doesn’t reflect the theme of being friends with basketball, and you write about the wrong time and place of playing basketball, and you are even punished, scolded and severely beaten for playing basketball, these things can’t express the theme or even destroy the expression of the theme at all. How can a composition deviating from the theme get high scores? The second question is: the selected cases are not typical, and the details are not divided. Basically, it is a running account, without plot ups and downs, and the logic is chaotic, which means the fact is unclear in one sentence. Of course, this kind of composition can not attract the attention of the marking teacher, let alone impress the teacher to get high marks! Of course there are other problems in that article, but I don’t say too much, just pointing out the direction he should revise. I asked him to think about what he liked to play basketball through? To help him write this matter in detail and properly, The description is vivid. Let him list the benefits of playing basketball on the draft paper? What fun does it bring him? Then he was instructed to combine these events and feelings organically and combine them according to certain logical structures to form an article that accords with the theme and selects appropriate materials. After modification, I asked him to copy it on the composition and read it aloud. Then compare with the original text to analyze the difference between the two, and what is the advantage of the latter? It is really rewarding to let him revise his composition! Later composition training was carried out step by step. If he couldn’t write it, I would write it, or read the model essay to help him sort out his thoughts, or he wrote it and I revised it. After several times like this, I let him overcome his fear of writing a composition, and then I explained the skills of the beginning and end of the composition to him. I told him the psychology of the composition teacher marking papers for the senior high school entrance examination: a good beginning can attract the teacher to be interested in reading your articles, and a good ending can impress the marking teacher, and the marking teacher will be scored as soon as the paper is finished, therefore, a good ending is easier to get high scores. Of course, it would be better if the examples in the middle were selected properly! I don’t know whether it is important for him to deliberately remember a good beginning and a good ending, or whether he has experienced too few things himself? Until now, his composition has good beginning and ending, but not in the middle. The examples in the middle are always chaotic, or all made up, and there is no sense of reality when reading, so it is difficult to impress readers including teachers. In this way, composition still has a long way to go, We still need to work together. Like (prose editor: Di Mo Chengshang) the 30th year of my WeChat era

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In recent years, there are more and more people buying cars. Every New Year and festival, cars are everywhere on the roads, streets and roads in the village. Large and small cars, high-end, mid-range, low-end, all kinds. Those who went home for the Spring Festival and festivals all drove their own cars, making them look magnificent and winning honor for their parents. Originally, the streets and alleys in the countryside were not spacious, and the village roads connecting the village and the village were also very narrow. There were no holes in the two cars side by side, which often caused traffic jams. Sometimes it’s just a long time. At this time, I think of the days more than 30 years ago. At that time, there were no private cars, motorcycles and bicycles. People walk when visiting relatives and friends on festivals. Every time after the new year, adults and children, a group of people are walking to pay New Year greetings. I often see those who go to relatives on the highway. Adults are walking in front and children are running behind. In lunar January, the spring was chilly, and neither adults nor children could feel cold. The adult was warm when he left. He took off his hat and scarf. Children often run out of sweat. When there is snow, the children will throw snowballs while running. A snowball is thrown in the front and hit the children behind, and a snowball will also be formed in the back, he chased the child in front of him and often ran across the adults to the front. The adults watched the children playing and listening to their crisp laughter while enjoying the scenery of the four fields. Although it was not spring, the trees along the road were still bare without any green, the wheat seedlings were still buried in the snow and never turned green. After all, the year had passed and the spring was getting closer and closer. Magpies on the trees and sparrows in the snow were chirping, making them so lively. The air is so fresh, and I am also very happy. After walking, a bicycle came by, and the jingling bell rang from a long distance. The Walker flashed towards the roadside, and the bicycle passed by, which made the Walker envious. Children will shout loudly, Dad, let’s also buy a bicycle. A father will nod his head seriously and say that he will buy it by the end of this year. Children will shout happily, oh, buy bicycles, buy bicycles. In this way, I went to the relatives’ home unconsciously. At that time, cars were rarely seen. Who had relatives in the city could drive here once, which was a great thing. All the adults and children in the village were surrounded by cars, talking with each other. As a relative with a car, his face is very bright. At that time, most of the cars were jeeps, grass green, but now I can’t see them. Who had a bicycle was also a great thing in the countryside at that time. I didn’t know how to get better. Wrap the beam of the car with black or red velvet cloth or corduroy cloth. After each ride, scrub it clean, put some oil on it and put it in the house for careful storage. Who has something urgent to borrow? I am reluctant to say it. When I borrowed the car, my heart couldn’t be put down. I couldn’t put down my heart until he returned. When people return the car, they often have to go up and down, and check it inside and outside to see if there is any paint falling off or damaged places. If there is, they can’t feel distressed. Who married her daughter and accompanied her with a bicycle will make the little sisters in the village talk about it for many days, thinking that they should also bring a bicycle when they get married, which is a supreme honor. Who will marry a wife, If I bought a bicycle, the young man would envy it for a long time. When you get married, you also need to buy a bicycle to make the bride look up to you. It is convenient to travel by bike. When traveling with relatives, I feel very happy when riding a bike, with a light on my face. The big child sits on the front beam, and the mother of the child sits on the back seat, holding the child in my arms, next to the basket tied with the gift, he rode away in a mighty manner and shook the Bell all the way. The crisp bell was very pleasing to the ear. Make the walking eyes warm and the riders proud. Later, bicycles became a common means of transportation, a must for every family. Then some people began to buy motorcycles, whining and passing by on the road, causing many admiring eyes. Year by year, there are more and more motorcycles, and pedestrians have their means of transportation. At the beginning, the Walker gave way to the cyclist, and later the cyclist gave way to the cyclist. In recent years, there are more and more cars, all of which make way for cars. However, when cars are blocked there, two wheeled motorcycles or bicycles will have a place to use. Passing through the gap between the car and the car. Those who were sitting in the car waiting showed their envious eyes, and those who rode motorcycles or bicycles would say that two wheels were still useful at this time? On the road, there have been great changes over the years. I don’t know whether I am happy or worried. With cars, it is convenient to walk, but the road is no longer quiet, the exhaust gas of the car makes the air no longer fresh, makes the road no longer fun, and makes people become more and more lazy. I really want to go back to 30 years ago. I also want to see adults and children walking on the road, laughing and shouting. I was shocked by the birds flying in the tree, and the sun in the sky also smiled and sprinkled warm light.

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