In the first composition class, he extracted some good words and sentences. I asked him to say what was good about that article? Why do I get high scores? He asked me to say it because he wanted to hear it. Although I knew that he didn’t know how to say it before he let me say it first, I just smiled and then analyzed the conception, structure, theme, emotion, language and other aspects of the article. Because he listened carefully and was happy, I said by the way: we will still study composition next class, but next time we will start writing. But don’t be nervous. If you can’t write, there will be me. Let’s write together, or you can write according to your thoughts and ideas first, and then I will modify it. Let’s see how to modify it better? After the modification, you are responsible for copying it down and reading it aloud. Then we will analyze the difference between them and strive for greater progress, OK? He agreed happily. In the second composition class, we revised the composition of his exam together. I first analyzed why he only had 20 to 10 for the composition with a total score of 40? That is to point out what problems exist in his composition, and then point out the direction of modification. The title of that composition is that I am friends with basketball. He wrote that he liked playing basketball, and he had to sneak out to play basketball in class. As a result, he was caught and punished by the teacher. He also played basketball in other people’s vegetable fields several times, he was sued to his parents because he trampled someone else’s food, and finally got a severe beating. I told him that the first problem of this article was deviating from the theme. The title requires me to become friends with basketball. What do you like about basketball and what benefits does playing basketball bring to you? For example, it can make you healthy and happy, make your life full of fun, or when you are unhappy, playing basketball can make you forget all your troubles and relieve the pressure of body and mind, etc. But your writing that you like playing basketball doesn’t reflect the theme of being friends with basketball, and you write about the wrong time and place of playing basketball, and you are even punished, scolded and severely beaten for playing basketball, these things can’t express the theme or even destroy the expression of the theme at all. How can a composition deviating from the theme get high scores? The second question is: the selected cases are not typical, and the details are not divided. Basically, it is a running account, without plot ups and downs, and the logic is chaotic, which means the fact is unclear in one sentence. Of course, this kind of composition can not attract the attention of the marking teacher, let alone impress the teacher to get high marks! Of course there are other problems in that article, but I don’t say too much, just pointing out the direction he should revise. I asked him to think about what he liked to play basketball through? To help him write this matter in detail and properly, The description is vivid. Let him list the benefits of playing basketball on the draft paper? What fun does it bring him? Then he was instructed to combine these events and feelings organically and combine them according to certain logical structures to form an article that accords with the theme and selects appropriate materials. After modification, I asked him to copy it on the composition and read it aloud. Then compare with the original text to analyze the difference between the two, and what is the advantage of the latter? It is really rewarding to let him revise his composition! Later composition training was carried out step by step. If he couldn’t write it, I would write it, or read the model essay to help him sort out his thoughts, or he wrote it and I revised it. After several times like this, I let him overcome his fear of writing a composition, and then I explained the skills of the beginning and end of the composition to him. I told him the psychology of the composition teacher marking papers for the senior high school entrance examination: a good beginning can attract the teacher to be interested in reading your articles, and a good ending can impress the marking teacher, and the marking teacher will be scored as soon as the paper is finished, therefore, a good ending is easier to get high scores. Of course, it would be better if the examples in the middle were selected properly! I don’t know whether it is important for him to deliberately remember a good beginning and a good ending, or whether he has experienced too few things himself? 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